Onward to the Foothills

Yesterday the hunters ate only roots and grubs but now, in the fading light, they chance upon a lame bokkie. Hunt and kill are over quickly. Careful for the tinder-dry veld, they make a fire within a ring of stones and each eats their fill, leaving a portion for Aquila, who guards their improvised camp from a hungry howling wolf until dawn spreads her golden fingers.

The sun climbs and the dry savannah shimmers. A green smudge rises from the ripples and the hunters hasten to the acacia-shaded spring.

The eagle calls out
Owab attends the warning:
beware the serpent!


In case you’re wondering what in the world is going on, the previous episode of this little adventure is here.

Photo by Juanita Swart @ Unsplash

Written in response to two challenges:

– Di of Pensitivity101‘s Wednesday’s Three Things Challenge – YESTERDAY, CARE, HOW
– Denise Farley of GirlieOnTheEdge‘s Sunday’s Six Sentence Story Word Prompt – IMPROVISE

I also set myself the additional challenges of confining my piece to 100 words exactly and writing  in the haibun form. Just for fun!

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61 thoughts on “Onward to the Foothills

  1. Simple and descriptive with the execution to make it damn-near tactile!
    Excellent scene/view of a story.
    Good start to a serial SIx?

    (Don’t tell anyone, but I tried to find the meaning of the word/name ‘Owab’ lol)

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    • Thanks so much, Clark! There will be more. I can’t waste characters like Owab and Aquila!
      (Oh, and sorry for sending you down a ‘false’ rabbit-hole)

      Like

  2. Love this part two (I went back and checked part the one). The struggle and consideration of the hunter band as they progress to better days is told sparingly and powerfully. A great style. Then that warning of the serpent…
    Ford.

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